The story read well. I was intrigued but honestly did not understand it’. The meaning of the license plate? . Maybe it’s because I read no fantasy. I do read fiction but I read more non fiction. . Anyway I have a desire to understand this story. I need help
Down the Drain
Nice work - nice changes of pace that keep the reader on their toes
Cool story, lots of twists and turns.
The story read well. I was intrigued but honestly did not understand it’. The meaning of the license plate? . Maybe it’s because I read no fantasy. I do read fiction but I read more non fiction. . Anyway I have a desire to understand this story. I need help
Great worldbuilding and pinball specifics. I had a lot of fun reading this. And I recently played Captain Fantastic!
That was a fun read!
> But the ball returned, trapping him in a dead space as it rebounded against the bumpers near him, a deafening bing-bing-bing-bing bumper frenzy.
You've certainly made being trapped in a pinball machine terrifying!
Wow, so many visuals. Very Tron-esque in an analog sort of way. Nice work.
Oh, there was so much to love about this!