The story read well. I was intrigued but honestly did not understand it’. The meaning of the license plate? . Maybe it’s because I read no fantasy. I do read fiction but I read more non fiction. . Anyway I have a desire to understand this story. I need help
Nice work - nice changes of pace that keep the reader on their toes
Cool story, lots of twists and turns.
The story read well. I was intrigued but honestly did not understand it’. The meaning of the license plate? . Maybe it’s because I read no fantasy. I do read fiction but I read more non fiction. . Anyway I have a desire to understand this story. I need help
Great worldbuilding and pinball specifics. I had a lot of fun reading this. And I recently played Captain Fantastic!
That was a fun read!
> But the ball returned, trapping him in a dead space as it rebounded against the bumpers near him, a deafening bing-bing-bing-bing bumper frenzy.
You've certainly made being trapped in a pinball machine terrifying!
Wow, so many visuals. Very Tron-esque in an analog sort of way. Nice work.
Oh, there was so much to love about this!
Very cool story. That definitely "transported" me.
Nicely done. You had me for whole ride