Very good, I see what you did there. After a bit of googling I found out what toe beans are, I think its may be a transatlantic two nations divided by a common language thing. My mother never said to us Come inside now and wash that blood off your toe beans before dinner. She just called them paw pads.
The story read well. I was intrigued but honestly did not understand it’. The meaning of the license plate? . Maybe it’s because I read no fantasy. I do read fiction but I read more non fiction. . Anyway I have a desire to understand this story. I need help
Nice work - nice changes of pace that keep the reader on their toes
Thanks! But you meant toe beans, right? 😹
Very good, I see what you did there. After a bit of googling I found out what toe beans are, I think its may be a transatlantic two nations divided by a common language thing. My mother never said to us Come inside now and wash that blood off your toe beans before dinner. She just called them paw pads.
Cool story, lots of twists and turns.
The story read well. I was intrigued but honestly did not understand it’. The meaning of the license plate? . Maybe it’s because I read no fantasy. I do read fiction but I read more non fiction. . Anyway I have a desire to understand this story. I need help
G4M30VR = GAMEOVER
Great worldbuilding and pinball specifics. I had a lot of fun reading this. And I recently played Captain Fantastic!
thank you! I had to do a little research for this one.
That was a fun read!
> But the ball returned, trapping him in a dead space as it rebounded against the bumpers near him, a deafening bing-bing-bing-bing bumper frenzy.
You've certainly made being trapped in a pinball machine terrifying!
Yay! That was one of my intentions! :D
Wow, so many visuals. Very Tron-esque in an analog sort of way. Nice work.
Thanks!
Oh, there was so much to love about this!
Oh wow, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Very cool story. That definitely "transported" me.
Nicely done. You had me for whole ride
Thanks!
Very interesting, to imagine being sucked into a pin ball game. Why not think of a more non-conventional setup instead of a pin ball game?