I think you outdid the prompt, moving it to a "Stop and Save," only one of them, out near the city limits. (Cue spooky music from TV show Outer Limits). Fast clue to supernatural nature of what's happening, and the character of the old lady on the surprisingly fast scooter is a great, quick invention. And the single bottle of the out-of-circulation spirit cure gave me a hankering for a bottle of Hadacol. Every word counts. Great story.
Mrs. Bellagamba
I enjoyed it... I write some fiction myself, so reading how others write it inspires me.
Thanks for a Wednesday morning chuckle 😀. I’m curious ~ what was the prompt?
Unexpected and quite clever; bravo.
That was great! Maude’s a real character. For a moment, I thought she was going to curse him.
I think you outdid the prompt, moving it to a "Stop and Save," only one of them, out near the city limits. (Cue spooky music from TV show Outer Limits). Fast clue to supernatural nature of what's happening, and the character of the old lady on the surprisingly fast scooter is a great, quick invention. And the single bottle of the out-of-circulation spirit cure gave me a hankering for a bottle of Hadacol. Every word counts. Great story.
I like it a lot. =) It raises so many interesting questions. =)
You just can’t trust those 90 year olds. 😉