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I enjoyed it... I write some fiction myself, so reading how others write it inspires me.

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Apr 6, 2022Liked by Jackie Dana

Thanks for a Wednesday morning chuckle 😀. I’m curious ~ what was the prompt?

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Thanks! The prompt was:

"Frank the painter wants to be young again but the lady at Stop and Shop is in his way so he learns to foresee the future."

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Apr 7, 2022Liked by Jackie Dana

Unexpected and quite clever; bravo.

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Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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That was great! Maude’s a real character. For a moment, I thought she was going to curse him.

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I think you outdid the prompt, moving it to a "Stop and Save," only one of them, out near the city limits. (Cue spooky music from TV show Outer Limits). Fast clue to supernatural nature of what's happening, and the character of the old lady on the surprisingly fast scooter is a great, quick invention. And the single bottle of the out-of-circulation spirit cure gave me a hankering for a bottle of Hadacol. Every word counts. Great story.

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Aww, thank you so much!

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And Mrs. Bellagamba. A good name for a woman who must ride in a cart, or wheelchair, as I'm sure you chose the name with purpose, knowing that "bella gamba" means "pretty legs."

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Apr 8, 2022Liked by Jackie Dana

I like it a lot. =) It raises so many interesting questions. =)

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Hah! Coming from you, that means a lot.

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You just can’t trust those 90 year olds. 😉

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