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Jackie Dana's avatar

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Thanks! It was definitely a challenge to fit everything in and not go over my word limit!

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Geoffrey Golden's avatar

Well done! I’ve participated in those types of contests before and the lack of sleep always gets to me.

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Jackie Dana's avatar

Thank you! I'm a night owl but this was rough even for me. A few of my friends want to do it again in July but I'm not sure I want to give up an entire Saturday to the project. Because even though I didn't really start writing until after midnight, trying to come up with the idea took the entire day.

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Dascha Paylor 🇨🇦🍁🐻‍❄'s avatar

This is great! It's amazing what we can come up with under pressure. At those times I never feel great about what I'm writing, but when I look at it later, I'm usually surprised at how good the story is.

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Jackie Dana's avatar

Thanks! I really wasn't sure if I'd like it when I read it after the fact. I knew I had done something a bit different, but beyond that, I wasn't sure. But when I reviewed it, I thought it was pretty fun.

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J. M. Elliott's avatar

Great story! Fun concept and vivid characters :-)

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Jackie Dana's avatar

Thanks! It was fun writing the protagonist for sure.

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Chevanne Scordinsky's avatar

You had me at "super-duper". :-)

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Jackie Dana's avatar

Hah! The character is loosely based on three different You Tubers I watch. One of them talks kind of like Jimmy here.

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Chevanne Scordinsky's avatar

You got the banter just right so I can see his personality just by the dialogue.

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Jackie Dana's avatar

Oh, that’s great! I was hoping to do that.

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Ann Murphy's avatar

Loved this! It sounds like the start of a novel. I want to know what happens next as I’m pretty sure something is going to!

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Jackie Dana's avatar

Thanks! I have no plans to continue it at this point, but I never say never. Short stories have a way of becoming something bigger in my world. So who knows. I do really like the characters and think I could do more with them, that’s for sure.

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